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Words to Delete from Your Cover Letter: Hope, Hone, Drawn, Feel

The words hope, hone, feel and drawn appear in almost every cover letter.  I’ve explained below why you don’t want to use these words and what some alternatives might be.

If you want to make your cover letter stand out, make sure to avoid these words completely.  You might be surprised at the result.

1.  HOPESuccess sign

e.g. I hope to hear from you soon.

OR

e.g. I hope to be able to contribute my skills to ABC company.

Why not?

Hope springs eternal.  The company doesn’t care about your hopes and dreams.  They care about what you can do for them.

Alternatives:

I look forward to speaking with you further regarding my qualifications.

OR

My ability to take clear, decisive action will allow me to make an impact at ABC company from day one.

OK, now we’re talking!

2.  HONE

e.g. This summer, I honed my research and writing skills through a position at XX law firm.

Why not?

You and every other person honed something.  It’s an outdated and overused expression.  Tell them what you did and they will figure out that you honed your skills.  If you absolutely must, use “strengthened,” “developed,” or even “sharpened.”

Alternative:

My research regarding constitutional rights violations culminated in a report and recommendations that guided the ACLU in future actions.

It’s obvious this person is using some powerful research and writing skills.

3.  DRAWN

e.g. I am drawn to ABC company because of its outstanding reputation and high quality service.

Why not?

You get drawn to a person across a crowded room.  Companies don’t care to hear that you are drawn to them.  And a bonus tip:  companies with outstanding reputations don’t need to be told that you want to work there because of their outstanding reputations.

Alternative:

The relationship management skills I built while working in a state office are a match for ABC company’s commitment to outstanding customer relationships.

That’s so much better, isn’t it?

4.  FEEL

e.g. I feel the relationship management skills I built while working in a state office are a match for ABC company’s commitment to outstanding customer relationships.

Why not?

Can you see how adding “I feel” at the beginning of this sentence killed it completely?  Tell a psychologist how you feel.  Tell a company what you can do for them.  If you must, use the word “believe” instead of “feel.”  But see if you can avoid this type of language altogether.

Alternative:

The relationship management skills I built while working in a state office are a match for ABC company’s commitment to outstanding customer relationships.

Delete these four words from your cover letters and I promise you more creative and powerful language will show up.

Did you try it?  Share examples in the comments please!

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Is it Worth It to Compete for an Ivy League Education?

It’s undeniable that a degree from an Ivy League college holds a lot of prestige.  In fact, I have personally experienced the benefit of an Ivy League degree in my career, as I’ve set out first as a lawyer and then as a resume writer and college essay advisor.  “B.A. Yale ’91″ is enough to convince some people to hire me.  Many employers prefer to hire people with one of those “magic” schools on their resumes.

I have a secret to share:  I sometimes wish I had gone to Oberlin where the students might be a bit more hippie and down to earth, i.e., more like me.  But I will never regret having a Yale degree on my resume.  It helped me get into another prestigious school (NYU Law ’98) and has gained the respect of several employers and clients.

A recent article by Eve Tahmincioglu on msnbc.com, “An Ivy League degree no surefire path to success,” explores whether an Ivy League degree really makes a difference when it comes to how well a candidate will do in a job.  The article concludes that hard work, not the college name on your diploma, leads to career success.  Nevertheless, people with Ivy League degrees have significantly higher incomes than their non-Ivy counterparts:

“The typical Ivy League bachelor’s graduate earns about 27 percent more early in their career, and about 47 percent more by the time he or she is about 40, than the typical bachelor’s graduate from all U.S. schools,” according to compensation website PayScale.com.

I wonder:  Do employers like to hire someone from the “right” school simply because of the prestige, or do they beleive they can rely on the pre-screening that the Ivies (and other top schools) do on every admittee?  It seems to me that there’s a really good chance that someone who made it into an Ivy League school is among the best and the brightest.  That’s not to say that a huge number of the best and the brightest — and the most hard working — did not go to Ivy League schools, either because they did not get in or because they chose less pricey options.

It’s understandable that many students prefer to attend Ivies, regardless of whether this education is essential to career success.  Ivy League colleges come with a guaranteed caliber to the student body and community, to the professors, and to the education.  And of course, the degree opens up many doors with ease. 

The competition to get in to Ivy League and other top schools, as reported by Ms. Tahmincioglu in her msnbc article, is fiercer than ever:  “According to the Harvard Crimson, the school accepted a record-low 6.9 percent of applicants this year even though the number of applications actually went up 5 percent — topping 30,000 for the first time in the school’s history.”

The long and the short of it is that if you want to have an easier path to some of the most prestigious jobs in the country, a Yale, Harvard or Princeton degree will go far.  You still need to do well once you’re there, and you still need to work hard once you’re in the work force.  But the big names on the resume don’t hurt a bit.  And in my book, that’s enough to make it worthwhile to shoot for the best.

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Resumes for Lawyers: 6 Great Resume Formatting Tips for your Legal Resume – by Brenda Bernstein

I am a legal career advisor, after all…  so I wrote a series of resume tips geared specifically to attorneys and people in the legal professions.  Two of them were recently published on mylegal.com and they are formatting tips for your legal resume.  Go to Six Great Resume Formatting Tips Part One and Part Two

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The Origin of Job Interviews – The Armstrong and Miller Show – BBC One

It has never been your job skills that get you a job.  See how the cavemen did it in this humorous video from BBC One.  The Origin of Job Interviews

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Don’t Stop Looking [for a job] During the Holidays – from the NYT

Thanks to Jill Sarah Moscowitz of NonProfit Career Advisor for bringing this article to my attention.  The holidays can be the perfect time to concentrate on your job search!  Find out why:  Don’t Stop Looking During the Holidays – from the NYT

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How to Turn Downtime into Job Offers – from the NYT

Whether it’s the holidays or you just have a lot of free time on your hands, downtime does not have to beat you down.  How to Turn Downtime into Job Offers – from the NYT

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Common Grammatical Errors: Everyday words we use every day.

When we put two words together into one word, we create a “compound” word.  It is common for the compound word to have a different meaning than the words have by themselves.  We all know, for instance, that when we take the preposition “under” and combine it with the verb “stand,” we end up with a compound verb “understand” that has a new meaning (“understand” has nothing to do with standing under anything).  Likewise, when we take the noun “baby” and combine it with the verb “sit,” we get a compound verb “babysit;” clearly babysitting does not actually entail sitting on a baby.

I’ve noticed a tendency in many writers to combine certain 2-word phrases into single words, perhaps thinking that the meaning doesn’t change.  For instance, “stand out” becomes “standout” (the 2-word verb phrase changes to a 1-word adjective).  One of the most common pairs of words I have seen people put together ungrammatically are “every” and “day.”  Please note:  “Every day” does NOT mean the same thing as “everyday.”  Be careful when you choose to create this compound word about what you really mean to say.

First I will lay out the basics:  What do these words mean?  “Every day” (2 words) means “happening or occurring every day.”  Technically it’s an adverb modifying a verb.  In contrast, the compound word “everyday” is an adjective meaning “of or pertaining to every day;” “of or pertaining to regular days (as opposed to holidays); ”commonplace” or “regular.”

Let’s look at some examples of proper use:

  • I walk to work every day. (2-word adverb modifying “walk”)
  • I wear my everyday shoes to walk to work; I change to my Manolo Blahniks upon arrival.  (1-word adjective modifying “shoes”)
  • It has snowed every day for the past week. (2-word adverb modifying “snow”)
  • Snow is an everyday event during Wisconsin winters. (1-word adjective modifying “event”)
  • I wish I could eat chocolate all day every day! (2-word adverb modifying “eat”)
  • Some chocolate sure would spice up this everyday chili.  (1-word adjective modifying “chili” – and yes, cocoa powder adds just the right verve!)

How will you remember the difference between “every day” and “everyday”?  My simple trick is to add the word “single” between “every” and “day;” if it makes sense to insert this word, then the words must be separated by a space in place of the word “single.”  If inserting “single” does not work, you’re in the land of the adjective “everyday.”  Let’s try it with the examples here:

  • I walk to work every single day.  (Makes sense so it’s 2 words)
  • I wear my every single day shoes to walk to work.  (Doesn’t make sense so it’s 1 word)
  • It has snowed every single day for the past week.  (Makes sense so it’s 2 words)
  • Snow is an every single day event during Wisconsin winters. (Doesn’t make sense so it’s 1 word)

I’ll leave you to test the chocolate chili examples.  I promise they work.

Now let’s take a look at some common ways people misuse the word “everyday.” I’ll use 3 examples from LinkedIn.

1.  In an email I received from a LinkedIn marketing expert, the following phrase appeared:  “Great discussions and tips are taking place everyday with over 10,000 members.”

There are actually two problems with this sentence.  One is that tips do not take place, only discussions do; you would not say “Great tips are taking place.”  The other is that everyday is the adjective meaning commonplace.  The author meant that discussions are taking place every single day.  Therefore the correct usage would be “every day” (2 words).

2.    A LinkedIn discussion title came across one of my groups:  “Fast way to make money everyday.”

Again, this writer means “every single day” so the correct way to express his idea would be “Fast way to make money every day.”

3.    Here’s an example from a comment on one of my postings: “You learn something new everyday.”

Do you see the error?  I hope you are now highly trained in the distinction between “every day” and “everyday”!  I also hope my article has been your new piece of learning for the day.  Please pass the learning on to someone who will benefit from it today and every day.

Need writing help?  Contact The Essay Expert

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Happy Holidays!

The Essay Expert wishes you a wonderful, magical, and grammatically correct holiday season!

Best wishes for your success in the upcoming year.

Sincerely yours,

Brenda Bernstein & The Essay ExpertHappy Holidays

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Some Humor on Writing! From Frank Fiore

I thought I’d post something a little out of the ordinary today — you might get a good laugh out of these, especially if you’re a writer yourself!  Some Humor on Writing

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How To Network – Video on YouTube

Simple and slightly hokey but spot-on networking tips.  Video on How To Network

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